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Appendix D

Sample Feedback for Student Paper on a Popular Film

Note from Faculty to Student:

Andy,

I went ahead and submitted all papers to the Center for Writing Excellence. I used two writing services that are available: WritePoint and Plagiarism Checker. I encourage all students to use these writing services throughout their education. WritePoint will automatically review your paper for common errors in writing and the Plagiarism Checker will inform you of any content that may be plagiarized. This free service will also let you know what percentage of your paper has been cited. I hope that these tools will assist you throughout your education.

Throughout your paper, you will see feedback from WritePoint highlighted in blue while my specific comments are highlighted in yellow.

Please let me know if you have questions!

Dark Knight (Include a header)

The Dark Knight

Andy Axia Student

COM/156

April 15, 2010

Axia Faculty

[Please make sure to apply double spacing to follow APA guidelines]

The Dark Knight was the most popular film of 2008. [Stating it was the most popular film of 2008 is a big statement that needs supporting documentation. Also be sure to indent the first line of each paragraph] Unlike most popular summer movies it was also considered to be a quality film and was thought to be a contender to earn an academy award nomination. Ultimately that honor was not bestowed on the film, but it’s [Contractions should not be used in academic writing. Also in this case “its” rather than “it’s” should have been used. It’s = it is, while its is possessive.] popularity and [Insert a comma before "and" if the following (1) is the last in a series of more than two, OR (2) it begins a new clause (could be a sentence by itself)] ability to elevate the comic book film, which is rarely associated with quality storytelling, remain.

The film is a continuation of the direction that Batman Begins took. It [It...