Week 5 Assignment Com156

This paper was overall a well written paper, excluding some minor mistakes. If given a choice to revise this paper, personally I would change the supporting details of the paper. I would change the supporting details because they are not as strong as they could have been. For example when stating a fact there should be factual information to support it. In the first sentence of the paper it states “the dark night was the most popular film of 2008”. Well where are the supporting facts. How are people who never saw or heard of the movie, supposed to know this information? How am I as a reader supposed to know that it was the most popular film in 2008? In the third paragraph the writer also states “what makes the dark night fairly unique among comic book movies is the focus on acting and storytelling”. In the third paragraph it does not have any supporting information in order for the reader to know that its focus is on the acting and storytelling or that it is unique because of these reasons. Also in the third paragraph the writer states “unlike most comic book movies the actors are given moments to show case their acting abilities”. As a reader I would have to ask the writer to give me an example, show me the proof of the work.

In this paper I would also fix the problems with the run-on’s that are in it. In paragraph two it has a run-on that the writer could have broken up into two or three sentences, with a little bit of re-wording each sentence. Also in paragraph four it consists of a run-on that can be broken up to make at least two separate sentences, these were also a few missed comas and quotes, but other than that the punctuation was fine. I also noticed in paragraph five the writer had used a quote off Wikipedia but did not use quotations around the quote. In addition to the quote the writer did not use the page number or cite any evidence that should have been cited when quoting an author’s quote. Also in conclusion, the conclusion of the writer’s paper...