Comp 101 Final

1. Recent economic concerns prompted President Obama to meet with credit card industry executives in April, 2009. The national credit card delinquency rate has continued to grow in recent times, and the President, along with Congress, aims to end unfair fees and increases in interest rates. In addition, the President asked that all terms, disclosures, and statements be clear and easy to read for consumers. Confusing terms, often laid out in fine print, are believed to have led to the nation’s rising debt and delinquency.

I would have to say that paragraph number two (which I included) would have to be the one that I would choose that was most effective. The writer did a good job of keeping the paragraph flowing with interesting facts. The information in the writing that some people might not have known and the way it was written was not repetitive and boring. The writer included a variation of rhythm without using the same words over and over again. But still keeping the topic to the recent economic concerns, also explaining some of the ways to help individuals understand what the President is trying to do in order to help eliminate some of the confusion on the laws, putting an end to the unfair fees, and the increase in interest rates. The author made sure that the writing was a flowing paragraph of information that could be understood to the readers.

In my paragraph I used the term “there was”, and I believe what I am gathering from this is that it is not very specific, and does not give a clear location of where the information came from. Being more specific of where I gathered my information is where the improvement needs to be made. Writepoint is informing me that the term “over and over” is more effective in speech; however has little effect in writing. I have to say, I totally disagree with this statement, because I have read many books and they use this technique to convey a certain level of repletion by the character. When this is done in this...