The Dark Knight

In the paper The Dark Knight, I thought the essay would be interesting because I am a fan of the movie, but I found several things I personally would have done differently and I found it hard to stay focused. First off I do not think the introductory paragraph was well written. I think the first sentence should have been something that would catch the readers’ eye and draw them to the paper; instead the first sentence was opinionated. The writer said that The Dark Knight was the most popular film of 2008, but as the film was popular who said it was the most popular and where is the proof? The essay also lacked a thesis statement. I would have made an outline to help me stay on topic and to help organize the essay. This essay seemed very unorganized, and I would have wrote a thesis statement to follow the rest of the essay. I would have someone read the essay to help look for errors. I found a misspelled word and a few grammar errors I would have tried to correct.

The third paragraph was also opinionated. The writer stated that “The acting is impressive across the boards”, that may be true but I would have added some supporting details on to why the acting was so wonderful with some examples from the movie. The writer did say that Heath Ledger won an Academy Award, but that was mentioned in the second paragraph not the third, which was out of order. I am a fan of the movie, so I also know that there were only two Academy Awards for the movie; one being for sound and the other for Heath Ledgers role in the film. In the fourth paragraph I would have said ‘subdued colors, more darkness’ instead of “subdued colors, lots of darkness.” When writing an academic paper I would try to stay away from the word “lots”. The word lots is for a house on a lot or something in big quantities and does not fit in with the academic tone; it’s more of a casual tone how two friends would communicate. I would have also tried to do more research on the topic and I would not have used...