Com156 Final

Effectiveness in writing depends almost entirely upon the writer. Comparing paragraphs one and two can show the differences involved with effective writing. Paragraph one is a good example of ineffective writing. The writer wrote entirely in the first person perspective with short chopped sentences. This style of writing does not have good rhythm or sentence variety. The writer’s sentences do not flow together well and they do not inspire the reader to continue reading beyond the first couple of sentences. Paragraph two has better flow and is laid out well. Although there are not any short sentences in the paragraph, the sentence has enough variety to keep the reader’s attention. This type of paragraph tends to stimulate readers and make them think about the subject at hand. By understanding sentence variety, rhythm and the flow of the paragraph, the writer can enhance the experience for the reader. This can lead to a greater understanding of the subject that is currently under discussion.

The feedback from Writepoint was very helpful in explaining errors in my writing that I would have missed on my own. Writepoint made a suggestion for clearer writing in the sentence where I discussed the amount of short sentences in the second paragraph. I had originally used “while there are not any short sentences…” and Writepoint suggested that I change “while” to another word with better understanding for the content. The program also notified me of the use of passive voice at the end of my paragraph. I rewrote the sentence following the suggestions and I was much happier with the final results. One suggestion that was given, I did not fully understand. I used an apostrophe after the word “reader” in one sentence. This was to show possessive over the word “attention”. Writepoint made the suggestion of removing the apostrophe unless the word was meant as possessive. Since this was the case I ignored this suggestion and kept the sentence as it was....