Composition for China College Entrance Exam

根据下面的漫画,写一篇英语短文.

漫画大概的内容是：一个人坐在凳上，两手袖着，头像汽球 (上写着“天才”)，与颈分离，之间用线相连，右脚踝用带有沉重大铁球的铁链栓着（球上写着“懒惰”）。

In the cartoon, the man enjoys being clever and wishes desires to do accomplish something a great splendidjob. However, as we can see in the picture, On one hand, his head, with thea word “genius” on it, turns into a balloon and flows up, indicating that the man is born clever., meanwhile Nevertheless on the other hand, his right foot is attached to a heavy chain marked with thea word “laziness” on it, which means prevents he him can from never flying high. (or preventing him from…..)

Up till now, there have been many examples, like Fang Zhongyong, a very talented child in our old time. However, he has never learned more since he was a child, unfortunately , he at last tended to be as normal as ordinary people. No one can succeed just by thinking without any action, . Nno one can be rewarded without any efforts., Nno matter how great a person’s talent is. Nonetheless, people can achieve many things through diligence. For example, Helen Keller, as we all know, she couldn’t hear or see, which led her can’t talk. But she wanted to know more about the world and she never gave in to her disabilities, and with the help of Miss Sullivan .who was disabled herself, as well as her perseverance, she became one of the greatest writer and speaker in America.

Above all, diligence is of great importance of achievements. Only by working hard can we be outstanding.

Grade: 16 out of 25.

There are many grammar mistakes in this article. Some of the sentences are quite confusing, especially because of the inaccurate usage of conjunctions (连词). Each sentence seems to be literally separated with the others. There are also some Chinglish. All these make your article difficult to read and understand.

But still, the vocabularies of the article are used properly and excellently.

I recommend you first revise the article yourself. Pay considerable attention to the...