University of Phoenix Comm 155 Apendix G

The paragraphs I reviewed were number one and two. Of these two paragraphs, I believe that paragraph number two was much more effective. Paragraph number two was more successful at stating its point clearly and seamlessly. Most of the sentences were long, but the writer was careful to be sure the sentences made sense by making certain they flowed together effortlessly. Although the author did a great job with making the paragraph flow, there was little variety in the sentence length. Paragraph number one was quite the opposite. It did not have any rhythm like paragraph number two and many sentences were too short. It could have been combined with other sentences to make them longer and make the paragraph flow a little better, instead of reading like a person might speak. The differences between these two paragraphs shows how important sentence variety, rhythm and other writing errors are to one’s ability to make their writing clear and effectively state their point.

WritePoint can be a very useful tool to have as a student. Having a tool that will help correct your writing errors, especially for a newbie college student like me, will help me become more aware of my writing errors and more confident in my writing abilities. WritePoint offered different word suggestions to help me clearly express my point. It also corrected an apostrophe mistake I had made with the word ones. The use of a passive voice was another point that was brought to my attention. WritePoint stated over-use of the passive voice can make paragraphs officious and tedious to read. Some of the corrective suggestions WritePoint offered, I felt, were a bit confusing to decipher, never mind the distractingly bright blue font that seemed to make a mess of your paper. Combing through the blue font to find the mistakes I made was difficult and the language used required me to open the thesaurus more than once. I agreed with all of the correction suggestions, but feel that at times the...