Appendix J

Feedback Received

List the details provided in your feedback under each of the following categories. Revisions

What changes you will make to revise your paper based on this feedback? Explain your answer.

Example

The instructor indicated that my research paper should not be written in first person. Example

I will go through each page of my paper and remove the use of first person. I will rewrite each sentence properly in third person. I will also review the material in the Center for Writing Excellence that will help me better understand how to use third person correctly.

Instructor Feedback

1. The instructor indicated that my research paper has some clarity that needs to be addressed.

2. The instructor indicated that my conclusion seems to give advice and should not conclude that way

3. The instructor states that my paper should be double spaced

4. The instructor indicated that the body needs further development in order to demonstrate the topic in depth.

5. The instructor indicated that The transition from first to second paragraph needs work

6. The instructor indicated that there are some spelling and grammar and sentence structure errors.

I will be rereading my essay to identify any of the clarity issues. I will be adding additional information to make complete and full thoughts and stronger points as needed.

I will be rewriting my conclusion to not come across as giving advice. I will need to restate my thesis and brush upon concluding my main points.

I will be changing my setting on my paper to double space to meet the APA standards in writing.

I will be adding additional fact or statics to further develop my essay in order to demonstrate the topic in depth. By doing this it also address some of the clarity issues that my paper has.

I will be taking a closer look at the organization of my paper to a sure that my paper transitions better from paragraph to paragraph. I...