The Yellow Wall Pper

Peer Evaluation

Writer’s Name: Paul Jones

Reader’s Name: Jennifer Thompson

1. What is the thesis statement? If there isn’t one you can identify, sum up what you think the main idea of the paper is and suggest a possible thesis.

“James’ realistic portrayal of the modern American through Winterbourne and Daisy demonstrates how they are lacking in social graces, rebelling against societal rules and how this non-conformity and rebellion can have dire consequences.

2. Do a quick post draft outline of the paper by making a list below of the thesis, followed by the first sentence of paragraphs 2 onward (you can copy and paste the sentences in a list below). Looking at this post draft outline, do you see a clear focus on the article that the paper is responding to? Are there any body paragraphs that seem to slide off focus? Suggest areas where the topic sentences need work. Also, note any paragraphs that start with quotations, as that means there are topic sentence ideas missing from the paper.

Thesis Statement: James’ realistic portrayal of the modern American through Winterbourne and Daisy demonstrates how they are lacking in social graces, rebelling against societal rules and how this non-conformity and rebellion can have dire consequences.

Body Paragraphs:

~ From their very first meeting it becomes clear to Winterbourne that Daisy is not the same as the proper European girls he is used to meeting

~ Daisy’s mannerisms and actions do not go unnoticed by the rest of the guests of the hotel

~ Being consistent to her character Daisy shows unexpected familiarity and bold assumptions

~ Daisy continues to rebel against accepted behavior by her intimate interactions with their courier as well as other locals

Conclusion: A continuing disregard for social rules and etiquette is expected of Daisy as she becomes overly incautious

3. What specific evidence does the writer provide to explain...