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Childhood obesity has become an epidemic in our country. It is for this reason that our children are the way they are today. The issues that the children and young people are having today are that they have to fix their own meals or order takeout. Childhood obesity is a growing problem in our country and it will not go away by its self. The way that we can slow down the rates of childhood obesity and maybe turn them around to be proactive. The fitness and health is our parent’s responsibility and the schools could have a big influence on our children. The schools have our children the most part of the day and this is the reason they should take the time to figure out what they can do to help our children. The way we use to eat back in the day was so healthy, now our children are having to eat fast food or micro wave food. Another reason...