Apendix C Week Five

Appendix C

After reading the Appendix C, I found many grammar errors, and also the way that is write it is confusing to the reader. In the first paragraph, it star with a week paragraph, I believe that it needs a strong thesis statement that will help you to tell your readers what the paper is about. Also where it said “The dark night was the most popular film of 2008” it need a supporting sentence that will support what you said, such as a review form a source that is credible . There a part where you contradict what you said in your first sentence, I believe that to write a good essay never said “but”, “in the other side” or, “it is not always this way”.

In those first two aspects I think that I will change the first sentence, add more details that will explain to the reader what I’m going to write about, the thesis statement is one of the most important parts of an essay and if it is not well define the main point, the reader will never understand your point of view and what you want to express. Having supporting sentences also can help to write a good essay, in this paper I could add the supporting paragraph that need, this can show to the reader that the paper has all the information that it need to have to be a understandable essay.

Run-on sentences, this is also a problem that I can change from this paper, the run-on sentences are very long sentences that you can break in two or three sentences. This can confuse the reader in what the sentence is trying to said, because it can star in one way and end in other way. When a paper has a series of words like, milk, eggs, and juice, it has to have a comma before “and”, I found this in the paper and I think that it can be changed just to remember to put a comma before and when the paper have a series of words.

Spelling words can be a problem that we cannot see, but it is very important to check the spelling before submitting one paper, this can affect the way that the reader understand the paper,...